Show, Don't Tell Rewrite
Converts a flat, tell-y sentence about emotion into a scene that earns the feeling instead of naming it.
Rewrite the following sentence(s) so the emotion is shown through action, physical sensation, dialogue, or specific detail — instead of naming the emotion directly. Don't add new plot events; stay inside the same moment, just render it more vividly. Aim for 2-4 sentences. After the rewrite, briefly note which techniques you used (action, sensory detail, dialogue, subtext, etc.). Original: [paste sentence(s) here]